Are you ready for some great feedback on your PB Pitch? Wonderful! You are in the right place.
A little Housekeeping: If you stumbled onto this post and don't know what's going on, click on the Submission Guidelines link here. That is also where you can ask any questions or make comments. The post you are one is Reserved For PB Pitch Entries.
UPDATE!!! I've created a Revision post to add Revised Pitches to. Want more feedback? Or maybe you just want to show how Critiques have helped. Comment in the Revision Post.
Meet the Team -
I have some great peeps to help me keep this going smooth. PJ Mcilvaine and Rani Iyer are going to be on hand in case I don't catch everything.
And another shout out to Kristin Kinczel for creating our mascot Colonel Cobb.
Without further ado...
PB Pitchers -
Add your link to the list below OR Add your comment with your pitch. Two Pitches Max.
As much as we'd love to help you on all your PBs, we can't. Truth is, agents and editors make you only pick ONE to pitch, so I figure we are being more than fair.
Here's an example of an entry -
AUTHOR: Coach Garrett
PB TITLE: Alien Food
WORD COUNT: 300
PITCH: From mashed potatoes to canned peas, each Earth-grown food looks yuckers to an alien tot, but after stomping his tentacles he discovers each dinner is all out of his world. Then his Uunka serves an Earthly treat that freezes his tastebuds.
PB Critiquers -
Leave feedback on others by replying to comments or adding comments to blogs.
Here's a great example of feedback -
"Alien tots and yucky foods---this sentence pops. We get a clear picture of what the issue is, and "stomping his tentacles" is a fantastic visual clue. However, the second sentence is confusing. "Uunka" must be alien word for Uncle, I guess, and the Earthly treat that "freezes" his tastebuds must be ice cream. But what does the alien tot think of this frozen treat? Does it send him into orbit? Or plummet him into an black hole. Since I'm a sucker for aliens, I'd suggest that adding a little more conflict or resolution to round the pitch and give it some finality would bat it out of this world." -- PJ Mcilvaine
Questions and Troubleshooting -
Comment on the Guidelines post, contact me (or another of the team), or Tweet me @lexicalcreation #PBWorkshop
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